Desultory thoughts.

[rejectomorph]

Another hot, boring day in Paradise. After spending way too long looking at pictures on Webshots last night, I finally got to sleep just before dawn. I didn't wake up until 1:00pm. Since the bathroom is on the east side of the house, it was hot. Impossible to dry off after showering in weather like this. At least the septic tank hasn't backed up yet. I have no idea what to have for dinner. Probably just get a pizza. Man, what a dull life I lead in this place. I really need to meet somebody.
Look at that! I just wrote about sleep, poop, food, and (lack of) relationships. Hey, navarchus! You were right!

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Re: Bad pomes

[eideteker.livejournal.com]

I'm blown away by actual feedback... man.

I'd love to have you read some of my earlier stuff; of late it's been mostly a purge. I can dig up some links if you'd like... there's also a decent amount on my old website under "Saccades"

My poems used to feel very methodical and plodding because they were trapped in rhyme schemes.

Re: Bad pomes

[rejectomorph]

Send links, by all means. I'm always better at reading poetry than I am at writing it. In fact, I think that you probably have more raw talent for poetry than I do. I've had to study it carefully, just to be able to fake the ability to write it. In my college creative writing classes, the poems were the only assignments on which I didn't get top grades.
::weeps plaintively:: But, what the hell. My essays kicked ass!

Re: Bad pomes

[eideteker.livejournal.com]

I can imagine your essays would!

I'm trying to find some more "even" poetry. Let's see what I've got.

Hmm... not entirely even (by a longshot), I'm most fond of "Not Fade Away" here (even thought it's a song): http://www.livejournal.com/talkpost.bml?itemid=868447

If you want UNEVEN try a stream of consciousness: http://www.livejournal.com/talkread.bml?itemid=818955&nc=1

I really liked this poem for the sheer honesty I felt when I wrote it: http://www.livejournal.com/talkread.bml?itemid=1156113&nc=1

Untouch is not too bad, here. http://www.livejournal.com/talkread.bml?itemid=1133779&nc=1

This day was just RANDOM: http://www.livejournal.com/users/darksmile/day/2001/01/11

And then the EARLY works:

The second poem I ever put on the web: http://www.people.cornell.edu/pages/nat3/wordpoem.html

The ultimate in bad romantic poetry: http://www.people.cornell.edu/pages/nat3/stilts.html

The ultimate in bad COLLEGE "sexual" poetry; a style parody: http://www.people.cornell.edu/pages/nat3/onion.html

Rhythmic and droning, my first dirge: http://www.people.cornell.edu/pages/nat3/lake.html

The first poem here made me proud to have written it: http://www.people.cornell.edu/pages/nat3/spilt.html#I

I've always just liked the rhythm here. I point to this poem when I say my poetry is meant to be heard, not read: http://www.people.cornell.edu/pages/nat3/Chaste.html (so here go read it, ha ha ha)

Read at your leisure, and I hope you enjoy, more importantly. :)

Re: Bad pomes

[rejectomorph]

I managed to read your older poems Friday night while LJ was down. I was going to read those on this site Saturday night, but a power outage screwed up my schedule- I'll probably get to them tonight. In the meantime, one comment; Try reading The Lake without the first line. This goes back to what I was saying about showing the reader instead of telling the reader. Since the poem does show what you're thinking, you don't need the first line, which merely tells. The poem is actually pretty strong, with clear, concise images and simple declarations of fact. The first line just becomes sort of an anticipatory redundancy.